Most important part of my novel- did i capture this right? help me add some things?

i think you have some great potential, really love how you dont 1ump from sentence to sentence without much transtions like a lot of young wrters do, i think as the more writing experience you gain the more pleased you will feel about your work. i have written six books myself, working on the seventh and im also young- 19 so i know how you feel. i do have a suggestion for you, for this section ``He dug his face into the side of my neck and in my hair. His arms crushed me to him, and I struggled to get some air into my compressed lungs. But I liked it. I felt safe.`` you should use soft words instead of "dug, cruched etc" mainly because you used gentle words throughout the rest. maybe try words like "he nuzzled his face into my hair, or he pulled me to me, holding me against him well you get the picture! great work, good luck with your future writing i know you will publish some literature!